It was pretty original, I'll give you that. But original doesn't always mean good. I like your concepts and environment, but it's missing a lot of pieces.
Overall the whole thing was pretty boring, not much happened. Your voice acting leaves a LOT to be desired. Yes, a better microphone would help, but the acting itself was also very stale.
There's some potential here, but I'd say it needs more of an overhaul than a sequel.
If something isn't in motion, you shouldn't redraw it. It makes things look choppy. If you want this as a stylistic effect, you should prepare yourself for a TON of drawing.
Also, it looks to me like her head is getting consistently smaller through the video.
ok.im still a beginner but i cant wait to do more.
Good writing, bad acting.
The voice acting is reaaaally holding this movie back. They all sound robotic and lifeless. The concept is pretty funny, but I couldn't get into it. And clearly, neither could you.
Just work on that.
I'm glad you liked the writing, at least. The voice acting of the teacher was actually purposefully meant to be somewhat robotic, though it wasn't me voicing it. I DID voice the other characters though, and I have been working on my voiceacting ever since! I think I've improved... hopefully? Check out some of my newer stuff and let me know what you think.
Thanks for the review, by the way.
Not worth the time.
Alright, it's functional...to a point. You've got many, many errors within the way things lay out. Most of my problems with this game are aesthetic, but I'm not going to bag on your art.
However, you need some form of boundaries for the enemies. They appear everywhere. They go beyond the walls that you've set and will pop up in front of your character's arms and gun.
You've got quite a few typos and need to change your fonts.
The game is not riveting to say the least, but it's functional. Just keep at it.
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