Meh~
It was pretty original, I'll give you that. But original doesn't always mean good. I like your concepts and environment, but it's missing a lot of pieces.
Overall the whole thing was pretty boring, not much happened. Your voice acting leaves a LOT to be desired. Yes, a better microphone would help, but the acting itself was also very stale.
There's some potential here, but I'd say it needs more of an overhaul than a sequel.